Author's Note: 2nd draft of humorous argument
I did a total revision of the humorous argument. Literally, everything was deleted and this product is totally new. I still believe I lack humor, something that I tend to lack normally, so any input on this would be great. I used the format I did to try and represent the fact that the residents on Highway 29 outnumber those that wish to irrevocably change it. I do believe this point came across in the "We are more!" statement, but let me know if it wasn't clear enough. I am very open to any suggestions you might have on improving the humor and on changing the format.
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I think your cartoon works and gets across the point you're trying to make. You were concerned about the humor part, and I agree it's not laugh out loud funny, something you may do to make it more humor filled would be to make it more of a short scene, like a comic book or something. Split it into three panels so you can get across more of the story, and allow yourself the space to get a joke into the argument.
ReplyDeleteOtherwise, great job.
-Ross-
I think your piece is good although I am not really sure how to make it more funny. Maybe add some satire by putting in characters and making them say silly things? I thought it was good though.
ReplyDeletei think it is funny and i would stay with the first choice of the people surrounding the bulldozer....maybe you can include a small animal also saying they are more to represent the part of nature being destroyed
ReplyDeleteI think you have a good start with your cartoon. I do think the revised one is better, but adding a bit more of a humor element could help. As it stands, it almost looks like a united front against the highway people. Making the highway people (I guess TXdot) the bad guys would be a good start.
ReplyDeleteYour cartoon clearly states your point but you should try to add some text to it. Maybe add some sarcastic comments or something like that. I am sure it will be funny if you add these kind of comments.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Marian, I would include an animal or something giving a funny quote, therefore adding humor. You have an important and tough subject to get across, but I think you can figure out some way to add more humor. Try looking up some examples online for help/guidance
ReplyDeleteI definitely think that you should stick with your newest piece. Having the people around the bulldozer is good, but I am not so sure as to what that point may be. Is that the people are trying to keep the bulldozer from destroying anything. I think adding more comments on the actual piece would be more helpful in clearing that up and don't worry about it not being funny. Who cares :)
ReplyDeleteYour argument comes across clearly in your cartoon. I agree with some of the other posters that including an animal or some other sort of character might help. You could possibly have an animal standing there with the oncoming bulldozers and have it make some sort humorous statement. That would get the argument concerning the environment across clearly while adding some humor.
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